This is my snippet this
week for SFFSat. SFFSat is a
place where a number of authors post snippets from their written
works, and give the opportunity for comments, support and encouragement.
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My
snippet this week is again from Sorrel in Scarlet. My eponymous heroine is in the jungle with a group of people. They have just fought and slain a hideous monster - a ruzdrool, which Sorrel barbecued with magic. One of the others has been injured by the horror, and everyone is fussing over the victim.
I
glanced at Korhus. “Is the ruzdrool poisonous?” I asked.
Wrack,
beside me, murmured condescendingly “She means venomous.” I gave
him a venomous glare.
“I don't think so” Korhus answered, “It can
kill without it.”
I
took a deep breath, glared at Wrack again, and turned back to Korhus.
“I actually meant
poisonous”
I said mendaciously. “Can we eat it?”
Comments and brickbats welcome!
I'm going to be AFK most of today - hope to be back tomorrow.
ReplyDeleteYou really brought out her annoyance at being wrongly corrected. Deftly done! I love her practicality.
ReplyDeleteNice snippet!
Love the banter in this. Great dialogue!!
ReplyDeleteSounds deadly, regardless of whether it's venomous or poisonous. But is it tasty? :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat interaction. Love the 'venomous glare' bit.
ReplyDeleteNicely written--the reader definitely picks up on her annoyance and the snide comments about word choice will, of course, resonate with authors!
ReplyDeleteHa! Yes, I agree with Cassandra that writers will relate to word choice in this snippet. Nice interaction that reflects the tension in this scene.
ReplyDeleteNo wonder this scene is tense. He's hungry! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThere's a great back and forth here that I look forward to seeing more of. I love her defense of her word choice, Sao Cassandra was definitely right. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet. I love the snarky humor. Great back and forth.
ReplyDeleteNice dialogue. Did she barbeque it to the correct degree of doneness?
ReplyDeleteThanks to everyone for your comments. The ruzdrool does get eaten, but is not particularly tasty...
ReplyDeleteI love that this entire exchange is because she is hungry! Witty!
ReplyDelete:) Heidi
That's Wrack told, lol. Great snippet. :-)
ReplyDeleteNot sure I want to eat barbequed ruzdool whether it's venomous, poisonous, or both! :-P
ReplyDeleteBwha! Love the reiteration of venomous. Great exchange.
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