Friday 16 May 2014

SFFSat 17/05/2014 Black Ice part 5

This is my snippet this week for SFFSat. SFFSat is a place where a number of authors post snippets from their written works, and give the opportunity for comments, support and encouragement. Please also explore the other blogs that are part of this set - you can find the information here. 


This is part five of the Anton deGama story, Black Ice. Anton's crawler is sliding towards a deep trench on Titan. Anton has scrambled outside.



He swung out onto the narrow walkway over the tracks, and swiftly scrambled towards the nose of the crawler, hanging on grimly as it bucked under him. 

The clouds of methane mist and fragments of ammonia ice churned around him, coating his visor, but could not hide the gigantic chunk of ice just left of the crawler. It was easily fifty metres across. Anton judged his angle, and clipped the suit's safety line to a loop on the crawler's shell. The boulder was sliding cleanly, its weight carrying it smoothly. Anton paused a second, gritted his teeth, and jumped from the crawler.

The crawler jolted just as he leaped: the clean landing he had planned turned into a panicked roll to avoid the jagged shards at the edge of the ice. If one cut through the suit, his body would freeze in moments – but the sudden cold agony he feared did not happen. The suit was tough. He managed to pull himself onto the sliding ammonia. He glanced towards the drop-off: from here, he could not see how long he had. He just hoped it would be enough.

 As always, comments welcomed!

10 comments:

  1. Great action sequence. Hope he doesn't end up all bruised and such (although it has to be better than the alternative.

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    1. Thanks! As you say, bruises are the least of his worries!

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  2. What a great visual scene! Seeing Anton riding an ice crawler like a bull rider down the ice cliff towards the drop off? Great stuff. And his leap to the sliding Ammonia mountain travelling beside him? You've really ramped up the action on Anton here and you just keep the suspense going. Fun read!

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    1. Thanks - next week we'll find out what he's planning.

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  3. Wait a minute. He's trying to escape from the crawler but hooked a safety line to it while jumping from it? Did I miss something?

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    1. Yes - he's not trying to escape. He's got something more ingenious in mind.

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  4. I look forward to your snippets every week. I caught myself thinking of Anton while flipping through some images on Dreamstime. I'm afraid I'm very much hooked! Great stuff! I WANT MORE!!

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  5. Black ice is nasty enough on Earth.

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    1. Very true - I had a very scary skid in my car a good many years ago, and memory of that was part of the inspiration for this story.

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