My sword was feet away, and I wouldn't
reach it before he saw the movement.
If I could find a loose rock… there's
always a loose rock when you're walking, lurking and waiting
malevolently to twist your ankle. But when you actually need one,
when your life depends on it, the ground is as smooth and rock-less
as a ballroom floor. I had to act quickly, before he was ready to
come and deal with me.
I rolled sideways, flinging myself at
him bodily, going for his sword. If I could get it, he'd be unarmed.
Good theory- big if. He saw me move - he'd obviously been
half-watching me while he was patching himself up, and he grabbed for his
sword before I was within a foot of him. I slammed into his legs,
trying to take him down - and there was a new shriek, a different
timbre to anything I'd heard before. The graalur and I tumbled onto
the ground, both of us equally distracted as a new participant joined
the fray.
My snippet next week will reveal the identity of the newcomer...
Comments welcomed!
Loved the rant about where's a good rock when you need one and great cliffhanger at the end. I'm always a sucker for those. Can't wait to see who it is.
ReplyDeleteSorrel tends to rant quite often - I've told her it's not ladylike, but she never takes any notice of what I say...
DeleteWonderful tension and awesome hook at the end of this scene, Peter!
ReplyDeleteNice job.
:) Heidi
Thanks, Heidi!
Delete"As rockless as a ballroom" - nice description! I guess they're like buses :)
ReplyDeleteRocks are definitely like that. Never there when you need them.
ReplyDeleteDarn those sneaky, mischievous rocks! *shakes fist at sneaky, mischievous rocks* Perhaps this 'new participant' will have some spare rocks upon their person.
ReplyDeleteFantastic inner monologue coupled with great action. A most enjoyable read.
ReplyDeleteI like how the reader really gets into the character's head despite all the action. You definitely have a knack for fight scenes.
ReplyDeleteThe bit about the rock was brilliant. Excited to see what happens next!
ReplyDeleteIf I could find a loose rock… there's always a loose rock when you're walking, lurking and waiting malevolently to twist your ankle. But when you actually need one, when your life depends on it, the ground is as smooth and rock-less as a ballroom floor.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great pair of lines! Isn't that just the way of the world? I'm very interested to see who's entering into the fracas. Great snippet!
(sorry I took so long to comment)
Ha, love the bit about the rock.
ReplyDeleteOoh, wonder who the new participant is. Roll on next week! :)
Thanks to all of you for your comments - I've not been good at responding this last couple of weeks. Blame Sorrel (a phrase that works in most situations) - I've been struggling to finish the sequel, Sorrel Snowbound.
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