Friday 9 November 2012

SFFSat 10/11/12

This is my snippet this week for SFFSat. SFFSat is a place where a number of authors post snippets from their written works, and give the opportunity for comments, support and encouragement. Please also explore the other blogs that are part of this set - you can find the information here.

My snippet this week is again from Sorrel in Scarlet. My eponymous heroine is in the jungle with a group of people. They have just fought and slain a hideous monster - a ruzdrool, which Sorrel barbecued with magic. One of the others has been injured by the horror, and everyone is fussing over the victim.
I glanced at Korhus. “Is the ruzdrool poisonous?” I asked.
Wrack, beside me, murmured condescendingly “She means venomous.” I gave him a venomous glare.
“I don't think so” Korhus answered, “It can kill without it.”
I took a deep breath, glared at Wrack again, and turned back to Korhus. “I actually meant poisonous” I said mendaciously. “Can we eat it?”
 

Comments and brickbats welcome!

16 comments:

  1. I'm going to be AFK most of today - hope to be back tomorrow.

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  2. You really brought out her annoyance at being wrongly corrected. Deftly done! I love her practicality.

    Nice snippet!

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  3. Love the banter in this. Great dialogue!!

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  4. Sounds deadly, regardless of whether it's venomous or poisonous. But is it tasty? :-)

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  5. Great interaction. Love the 'venomous glare' bit.

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  6. Nicely written--the reader definitely picks up on her annoyance and the snide comments about word choice will, of course, resonate with authors!

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  7. Ha! Yes, I agree with Cassandra that writers will relate to word choice in this snippet. Nice interaction that reflects the tension in this scene.

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  8. No wonder this scene is tense. He's hungry! Great snippet!

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  9. There's a great back and forth here that I look forward to seeing more of. I love her defense of her word choice, Sao Cassandra was definitely right. Great snippet.

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  10. Great snippet. I love the snarky humor. Great back and forth.

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  11. Nice dialogue. Did she barbeque it to the correct degree of doneness?

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  12. Thanks to everyone for your comments. The ruzdrool does get eaten, but is not particularly tasty...

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  13. I love that this entire exchange is because she is hungry! Witty!

    :) Heidi

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  14. That's Wrack told, lol. Great snippet. :-)

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  15. Not sure I want to eat barbequed ruzdool whether it's venomous, poisonous, or both! :-P

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  16. Bwha! Love the reiteration of venomous. Great exchange.

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